剑桥雅思7test1表格作文,希望高手予以批改,20分不多,但保证送出

The data indicates that consumer spending on different items from five different countries in 2002,including Ireland,Italy,Spain,Sweden,and Turkey.The first section consists of Food,Drinks,and Tobacco.Specially,Turkey is accounted in 32.14% and Turkey spends more money on Food,Drinks,Tocbacco than other countries.The statistics from Italy,Spain,and Sweden were similar in the first section.Accroding to the data,the second section is made up of Clothing and Footwear.9% from Italy is the highest percentage and the lowest percentage is Sweden.The third section is Leisure and Education.The percentage of Italy and Sweden are 3.20% and 3.22%.Turkey spends money on Leisure and Education is 4.35% which is the highest percentage in the third section.As the table shown,most people would like to spend more money on Food,Drinks,and Tobacco and spend less money on Leisure and Education.修改完毕！请LZ给分吧 ⊙﹏⊙。

我30号考雅思,很担心小作文,写了一篇剑桥雅思7上的,考过的前

1. 请检查拼写和谓语动词搭配2. 文章结构很好，个别句子可删减3. 过去的数据用过去时，检查时态4. 更多体现饼图percentage的特征5. 更多的比较，不是只做数据陈列6. 最好注意英式拼写与美式拼写的不同以下是修改过的，不一定全对。

我也看过范文，觉得语言和写作风格能学习，但是逻辑结构每个人不一样。最重要是多练习怎么安排数据的分析，做到有条理却不需要面面俱到，语言不用很复杂都可以。

修改后共219，考场上还是容易写够的。The following charts illustrate the fuel sources contain in units of electricity for two countries – Australia and France. Both of which were, beyond doubt, the total productions of electricity climbed up dramatically from 1980 to 2000. Specifically, the figure of Australia increased from 100 to 170 units, and for France, it showed a double growth from 90 to 180 units.In Australia, by the year 1980, coal made a great contribution to the fuel production with 50%, and it kept the leading position in 2000, holding approximately 75%. Similarly, the hydro power increased slightly from 20 to 36 units. While both natural gas and oil experienced declines from 20 and 10 units to only 2 units respectively.In comparison of France, however, the hydro power dropped from 5 to 2 units being the minor source, whilst the oil ascended from 20 to 25 units. It is notable that coal and natural gas were the main electricity sources in 1980, with the same figure of 25%. Specially, the nuclear power, which was not used at all in Australia, had a steady raise from 15 to 126 units of electricity, ranking the first among all elements.Overall, it is clear that by 2000 these two countries relied on different principal fuel sources: Australia relied on coal and France relied on nuclear power.。

【关于剑7作文的参考价值本人11月将烤鸭,最近主要看写作.都说剑

我建议你不要一上来就看剑7··毕竟这书刚出来··又只有四篇TASK··要好好利用这宝贵的最新真题首先我觉得LZ应该去买本稍便宜的剑4来做或者更便宜的剑1··虽然题目老，但毕竟是曾经的真题··做完这些老题至少就对雅思考题有个初步印象了··然后再来做剑7既然是真题，那么一定要按雅思正式考试的时间标准来做，就拿写作来说一定先自己一小时内把真题大小作文都写完，然后趁自己的思维还热乎赶紧看后面的范文，看看考官的范文到底好在哪里，跟自己的文章思路做下对比，揣摩下考官为什么要这样写，这样的行文思路有什么好处，自己以后能不能这样写.这是思路.然后看考官的用词，你会发现所有剑系列的范文用词都很简单，偶尔一个大词那也要仔细研究·然后掌握（其实这样的词很少），关键是要掌握考官用词的准确度，这个才是精髓，时间长了你会发现其实有时候考官是在刻意用简单的词汇，但妙就妙在简单的词汇被用的恰到好处，这个是最需要学习的最后是句型，我想这是整篇范文最出彩的地方，拿自己的文章跟范文比，真的会觉得自己句型的幼稚，范文都是精挑细选出来的，好多句型都太巧妙了，最精炼简洁的句子表达出最完整准确的意思，这是一个好句型的标准，然而范文毕竟很少，我们要做的就是用这些范文来激发我们的思维，举一反三，自己沿着范文的思路来创造自己的文字.其实不管你要考多少分，实在的讲剑系列这套书就足够了，能把这套书消化好，多少分都没有问题。