雅思作文求评分,谢谢啦

我觉得你写的不错，结构很清晰，论点和论据一目了然。长短句结合。也有例子具体的分数我不好评，因为我的作文也就考了6.5.我就说说我认为的不足的地方吧，希望能帮到你。

第一是按照你的观点，你认为先工作旅游是好的，那么主体写的时候最好先写你不同意的观点。也就是把你这两个主体段换一下位置。第二是如果你想拿高分，最好能用上一些好词来代替比较普通和简单的表述。第三是我觉得最后的conclusion说这样可能会让年轻人找到一些方向这个观点应该是一个新的观点吧？你的支持段里并没有说到这个好处。而结论段式不允许出现新的观点的，应该是总结你的陈述。如果你想加上这个支持观点可以写进主体段里。然后综上所示，虽然先工作旅游有一些缺点，但是它既可以增长知识，又可以帮助青少年更好的实现目标。所以你支持先工作旅游这一观点。

总体来看六分以上是绝对没问题的，如果结合你小作文也不错的话，六点五的可能比较大，当然没准儿对哪个考官的胃口七分也不是没有可能的。

【求好心的老师可以细批一下我的雅思作文100分送上作文是剑桥五text

The first chart illustrates what is the main reason for study among different age students. The second chart indicates how much support (is) received from employers in different age group. As can be seen, the percentage of those who study for career saw (sees) a fall with the age grown (grows). But ,while the percentage of (whose 改为 those) who study for interest is increasing and the proportion of employers support(s) hits a bottom in the age group (of) 30-39.(For those) Under 26, (the) proportion of those who study for career(s) (stand 改为 is standing) at 80% that (study) for interest (is) only at 10%. However , with the age grown (grows) that (study) for career decreases to just over 20% in (the) group of over 49 that (study) for interest rises to 70%.The proportion of employer support reaches at over 60% in the group of under 26, and experiences a downward trend ,bottom(s) at (just) over 30% in (the) group of 30-39, before rising (again), which grows to over 40% in (the) group of over 49.其实你写得非常之好，文体结构和语法运用正确，无须更改，只是有一些错漏，为了方便你可以知道错在那里，我用括号把修改了的括著.另外你问楼上为甚麽with the age grows 而不是with the age growing，这个你只要看你自己写的最后一句 which grows to over 40% in the group of over 49. 便应该知道是同一原因.还有一样要提醒你的是： that 和 which 的准确标点符号法.that 之前是不用逗号的，但which之前则一定要用逗号，这是一个重要的英语文法.请切记！。

求大牛雅思小作文批改！TEXT1的小作文,帮忙改下错,平下分

The graph describes the portion of the population above aged 65 between 1940 and 2040 in the three countries---USA,Sweden and Japan.As shown in the graph,it is expected to have increments in the rate of old people .In 1940,the proportion of population above age 65 remained extremely low,as the figure of these countries stood at 9%(in USA),8%(in Sweden) and only 5%(in Japan).However by the end of the 1980 ,the number of old people in USA and Sweden had dramatically grown ,arriving at 15% and 14% respectively; by contrast,it had indicated a slight decrease in Japan ,then reminded approximate 3% in the corresponding period .Subsequently,fluctuation showed ,but had been predicted that the rate of the elder was going to descend around 10% in both USA and sweden.After 1980,the number of Japanese old people had been consistently toward an upward trend .The portion of population above age 65 in Japan will overtake it of Sweden and USA in(around?) 2030.Clearly,the circumstances of USA,Sweden and Japen will reach the similar point.。

雅思小作文求批改+评论 内容：剑桥8 test 2

第一段changes -----varies

第二段spending---expenditure on this leaped by 10%, reaching the proportion of 50%

第四段There was a downward trend. It decreased from 28% in 1981 to 22% in 1991. Consequently, it descended to only 5% in 2001.最好连成一句吧 There was a downward trend, which subsided from 28% in 1981 to 22% in 1991, and consequently descended to merely 5% 10 years later

第五段experienced up and down---fluctuated,spending---expense

结尾 时态不大对。按你原来的可以改成 In a word, the most principal segment turned out to be the salaries of teachers, occupying approximately half of the overall expenditure. The fluctuation of spending on other issues, such as insurance and resources, could be witnessed as well.

雅思考试对于一些小作文有哪些小技巧？

1. 饼图条图线图： 记住这四个词：“趋势，极值，拐点，关系”，引申出来的一些表达：趋势上升下降（急升急降，缓升缓降，保持不变等）；极值点必须描写（reach the top、bottom类似表达要会）；拐点必须描写（描写拐点善用连接词）；关系就是比较（如A是B的几倍、几分之几等） 2. 地图：看图说话，如果是比较就是上课Eileen老师说的“大家来找茬”；如果是选址题，就描述，善用连接词善用第三人称做主语。

如图里有个CAR PARK，很多同学会写There is a park…但用第三人称作主语，如Residents can park their cars at the car park which located…这样会显得巧妙不少！。

哪位大牛帮我批改下雅思 大概多少分 ,剑5 text4 的小作文 谢谢 本人高

你这篇应该是6分。

开头第一段，不要特地把line chart,bar chart写出来。显得有点啰嗦，而且我们主要看你是否能把图表信息描述清楚，至于是啥图，并不关心。第二句话，很有问题。我想这应该用the most popular travel destinations 而不是famous。

第二段： 不要老用visitors，换成tourists或者travelers都行。both arrived at around 10 millions respectively. 这里，怎么既用both又用respectively，那么到底是都还是分别呢？ a sharp growth UK visitors visited 5 most popular states were。。。 缺少the，改成the 5 most popular nations among UK tourists 要好点

最后一点，对你的内容选择上有点建议。既然给你2个可以比较的信息，你就得比较它们一下。用一些词比如 几倍多，更多等等。用的词有点简单了。语法没有太大的错误，基本过关。从句的量可以再多一点。所使用的逻辑衔接词，都挺不错。但是，在描述时间轴上的信息时，缺乏衔接。描述得也略微简单了点。总的来说，6分是一个比较合理的分。

剑桥雅思6 写作 test2 第一篇小作文 书上只有一个6分的考生作文 求范

雅思写作参考书，我选哪本

在雅思考试当中最让人头疼的可能就是写作了，见过太多的从4.5到5.5挣扎很多次却依然距离6分很遥远的同学，惋惜之余，也在想什么原因导致了这些同学的悲催现状呢。

辅导资料我们并不缺，市面上各种写作指导不下30种。写作理论体系也不缺，什么单边式，双边式，让步式，不一而足。对于一个7分的文章应该是什 么样，大家也是各说各的。虽然有我们有统一的评分标准的指导，但是什么人的解读最有效呢？聪明的同学已经猜到了，当然是雅思考官。考官的标准才是我们唯一 需要遵循的标准。而考官的标准去哪里找呢？毫无疑问，答案在剑桥雅思真题的范文。

我们现在用的最多的复习资料就是剑桥雅思的真题。大作文写作有一个明显的特点，那就是虽然话题多样，提问形式多变，但是常考的话题也就那么几个，从剑桥4-到剑桥8，包括A类和G类文章在内，共有30个题目，基本涉及到了过半数的雅思写作话题了。对于小作文，常见的四种图形--线图，饼图，柱图，饼图--以及两种不常见的图形--地图和流程图--每一种类型在剑桥真题当中都有所涉及。

因而，同学们再准备写作的过程当中首先要做的就是要将剑桥真题当真的9分考官范文做到熟读成诵，熟悉其写作套路，思维模式和常见句型。这样，我们就会发现，其实很多市面上写作参考书里面的分段理论，开头结尾段的理论，甚至一些常见的句型和短语，如in terms of, with regard to等，都来自于官方范文。这样，如何锻造出一篇高分作文，对我们而言将不再是秘密。

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麻烦哪位高手 帮我看看这篇雅思小作文,感谢！

是翻译吗？

剑5 Test2任务1

两列图说明，显示了两个理由五学生中学习年龄（在26-over 49）和支持的环境下，雇主。

它显示了一个中等下降为工作学习的学生，在年龄上。有80%的学生（在26年岁之间的职业，学习是大概四倍以上49年岁学生们。然而，随着年龄的增长，发展趋势的研究兴趣的学生把描述一种巨大的上涨，从微薄的10%（在26）的70%(49)。巧合的，在年龄33 - 41，两个两个原因是占40%的总数。

当它是指雇主的比例支持，均下降62%的股价在组（26）下到磐石为数不多的底时（32%），这是1:6 7,1:23,1：前反弹。

最重要的是，如果两个形图被视为其中，读者可以从中发现，高的学生所占的比例（工作）下的年龄群26）是缠绕着强烈的雇主支持。

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谢谢

剑桥雅思6test2 小作文,高手来估分,谢谢

"per person per year" can be used in speaking but not academic writing.

You should not use "we" in academic writing as well.

"the chart describe us" is a translation of Chinese which has a grammar mistake. It should be "the chart tells us" but unfortunately, not in academic writing again. U may use "the chart shows that the trend of travelling more often than before。

What do u mean "As the car saw a dramatic growth"? I guess its another grammar mistake.

"In sum" should be "in conculsion" or "In summary".

Generally speaking, your essay is not bad but it should not be scored over 6. One of the reason is that you just list all the figures rather than comparing them. For example, it would be much better if you said "Taxi is more popular because its recent figure is more than 3 times than the previous one."

The other reason is you didnt point out the trend that people prefer to go further. Thats why the usage of car, long distance bus and taxi increases but walking and bicycle drops.

I suggest that you should spend 2-3 mimutes to analyse and find out the relationship between the figures first. Then you can start writing.

Practicing more helps you to improve your writing skill. Good luck and fighting!